Bitten Part One

by Natalie Partna
(Portland, OR, USA)

Josh

Josh

Lilian walked through the graveyard, smiling. The note had worked. Josh had come.
"Hello?! Lily Blossom?!" Josh yelled into the darkness. "you said you knew who killed my brother! Who did it?!" He howled.
"Me." She said, walking out of the fog towards him.
"W-why?" he asked, lightly shaking out of fear.
"Your scared... don't be." She said looking at him from the bottom up slowly.
"Why?" he demanded, recapturing his cool.
"Because he knew what I am and what I want... Now your free for the taking..." She said walking around him slowly, licking her lips.
W-w-why do y-you want me?" he asks slowly.
"Because I love you" She says.
"Oh" he says, dumbfounded. "What are you?" he asks understanding what she said finally.
"Your mine... and it doesn't matter" she says from behind him right next to his ear, she moves the hair away from his neck.
"Stop Lilian" he says. She licks his neck, 'Stop!" he says louder now.
"Join me..." she whispers than bites into his neck. He groans, then passes out into her arms.

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Feb 02, 2015
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by: abnetrules

i cant believe u wrote it!!!!!!!!!!!! it is amazing! if u don't mind, i wat 2 use this as a part in my book and this would be perfect.

Feb 03, 2014
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by: Anonymous

Can i use this for my e.l.a class

Nov 07, 2013
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writing NEW
by: Anonymous

I loved it! I hope you keep writing. That would be a great book by the way.

Aug 13, 2013
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by: Anonymous

Every time I read this my heart flutters, truly ravishing! Can't wait to read the next installment of which I am hoping is a little longer and has more background to it.

Jun 03, 2013
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by: Anonymous

yea. pretty cool. its usually the other way around.

but was it abit too rushed... just saying.

cant wait to read the rest.

keep writing.

Apr 21, 2013
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by: justingraham

having the girl turn the boy in to a vampire was really cool usally its the other way around that's wat I like keepwriting.

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